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nights like these

coming home
sixteen hour work
bank statement mail box
hallway smell
foot on green
carpet
door open to apartment
too warm
oven smell burning
attempt
at dinner
empty couch
empty bowl
red eyes slit
face in sheet
I miss them

holding pillow in frail attempt
comforting
cradling
book in hand silent read –
once aloud – angels singing night
seeing sunrise
creep over as the Veil opens
due to your minds
entangling, open, with one
another – Us
walking over hardwood
eyes blazing
a million suns simply on the tips of tongues
wit, wisdom, happiness
love

darker now
as sun sets
cover over – head on blanket
recession
depression
boxes littering apartment
lovers in another state
lovers in the same state
lovers in my state
of mind – stating (more precisely –
screaming) love
from more than tongues or hearts
but souls

I miss them
©2009 ~johnfinch
:iconjohnfinch:

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:iconstitchy-bitchy:
Relevant and moving.

<3
:iconwyn--:
not bad at all. I don't usually like poems that seem to just list things. but this works. although I'd suggest cutting some of the love love mushy stuff in the last stanza, the emotion is overplayed in my opinion.

Great poem :)

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My chest is aching, it burns like a furnace. The burning keeps me alive - Byrne
:iconhillbillygirl:
THis is so awesome. I love the way it flows as you read it.

I love how it relates to one who is alone and states how they miss what they once had. It is a truth in life that someone goes through somewhere at sometime. Just aweome. :)
:iconneko-deidara:
your a good wwriter keep it up i recently just wrote a song - alex

--
Duck: quack quack quack!
Donovan: shut the fu*k up
Duck: quack quack!
Donovan: Your a dick!!!!

20 mins later

Donovan: planes are just giant flying penises with wings
:iconidkmahbiff:
I love your style of writing, keep up the good work!

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He's the reason that she still smiles
:iconlaughing-and-crying:
Great stuff!!! Keep up the great work!!!! 8P
:icontifa-amy-lockheart:
love it. great emotion in a simple way
=]

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"Ignorance is Bliss. Fuck right it is."
[link] - If... Why? By Me
:iconazizamanga:
This is freaking awesome and gives us a glimpse of someone's life. At least that's how it is to me. XD

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Don't ever give up your dreams.
[link]
:iconyouinventedme:
an excellent listpoem
the stilted flow suits it perfectly

--
an antique arms and armor expert

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