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Untitled by ~johnfinch:iconjohnfinch:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Untitled (For Elizabeth)

The perfect poem
doesn’t come from hands
or writers, poets, pens
from feathers or down
It comes from pillows
Sheets and drunken stumbling
it comes from waking up
and regret
from what or who you
did
the night before
It comes from deaths of thousands
and the drowning
of your sister
back when the two of you
were six years old
And you didn’t quite think
you were capable
of holding her under that long
or putting it on paper
©2007-2009 ~johnfinch
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~johnfinch Feb 26, 2007, 2:27:03 PM
Thank you.
:)

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~Confuzzlediness Jun 3, 2008, 9:01:50 AM
The twist at the end got me. :]
I was expecting it to end in a goody-two-shoes, easy-to-see way, but you threw me off and that's what a good poet can do.
Very, very good. Definately one of my favourite poems I've read on DA.
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Those that do die of it do seldom or never recover. - William Shakespeare.
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~johnfinch Jun 5, 2008, 4:22:55 PM
Thank you, it is much appreciated... Even if you have Shakespeare as your signature...

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~Confuzzlediness Jun 13, 2008, 4:50:35 AM
Ah well, we can look past that. You're welcome anyway. :]

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Those that do die of it do seldom or never recover. - William Shakespeare.
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~bulldogtia Jul 16, 2008, 5:59:03 PM
kinda sad, and twisted... but good =D

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~grimcloud Aug 22, 2008, 1:02:27 PM
The ending was pure brilliance, in my opinion. It's a very good poem (like you other ones), though.

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~Ra-Serenity Oct 27, 2008, 7:47:23 PM
As a poet I entirely agree, life is the poet not us, we are just its lowly scribe.
Wonderful poem, the emotion is strong and connects to the reader with a personal story, really brings it down to earth, which is sometime lost in the oft pompous world of poetry.
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