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I buried a tiny bird today, in the rocky patch
out back, just beyond the gate,
where weeds grow near the garden and
the shade of a young tree hangs
over the sunken hole

and as I buried that little bird,
who was black with white belly
who had white spots, pokadots
trailing up black back and feathered
wings, I watched the wind gently
move those ruffled feathers,
ever so slightly, like flight without
movement

it is funny, for I thought this is
how your breath must be, cigarette and
coffee smell, as you blow smoke out
with a smile, fragile, like porcelain,
so easily broken, like the little body
now buried in the backyard

but still something else, like a final
flight, after the sun light has disappeared,
when all the birds are nested,
save for solely one, still feeling the
breeze beneath outstretched wings,

alone, beatific,
soaring on the back of soft breath
escaping from your lips
Enjoy.
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Given 2012-10-04
This writer's gallery is full of poems of longing and wrongdoing from lovers to each other, but none so powerful as Your Breath (A Little Bird Told Me) by ~johnfinch ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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CindilAshleyPhoto Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Professional Photographer
idk why but this made me cry.
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ophilialove Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It is not often I am touched by poetry, and even less often that I am dragged into reading it...I am impressed, but more on the side of thankful, that someone was able to write so beautifully. I just hope that I will have a future time to listen to such beauty again.

Never stop writing.
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Ebony-Tiger Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh.
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Beautiful, amazing, moving. You are an inspiration. Congratulations on the DD!
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   Writer
This broke my heart and I love it for that. I'm not usually a fan of "old world" (if you can call it) language styles in poetry, but it works here. Just stunning-- congrats on your DD!
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EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I haven't found a poem that's really moved me in a while. It's . . . refreshing. I don't even know. Like when you just kind of sit back in some sort of stupor and be amazed. I really love the subtle implication. Thank you for such a wonderful read.
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Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
This is really lovely. I loved the vivid details of the physical world while interweaving the metaphorical throughout... lovely piece.
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Kalistik-Cheryzia Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, I like the poem a lot! Pokadots is actually spelled polka-dots I think, but the imagery and subject is amazing. :3
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Dorothy-T-Rose Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Professional
So sad and wistful. Perfect imagery. I can almost see it...yet somehow not quite, like a veiled face or a watercolour in pastels. Very soft and ethereal.

~D~
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IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A tad hard to follow, but very interesting!
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